scribbler
Jan 08, 2011

LAST TRACES

Nothing left but an old well
just off a dim road overgrown
to hint where others used to dwell
and tend the crops that they had sown

Where once fields grew and a home stood
this hole is all that's left
all overcome by hoary wood
of all but wanderers bereft

Whose forefathers worked this land
such a long, long time ago ?
where the tall pine trees now stand
I guess I'll never know

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

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Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

C

an archaeologist's dream and an anthropologist's challenge. But the layperson too does receive a beckoning from the voices of our collective past, whispering in the winds and guarded by the seasons. I guess we will never know everything. But it links us somehow and provides a continuity - thus having received the baton we run with it and pass it to the next generation into posterity.

S

while hoping we leave more than forgotten traces when we are gone. Very good of you to come by and comment..............scribbler

S

I am trying to write Some poems that don't ramble on so much( not always successful though lol). Always good to hear from site's newest fiance...........................stan

S

you may be remembering " Crumbled Bricks ", "forgotten dreams", from here or "Homeplace" from old site. I find myself drawn to this theme occasionally lol.If not , Do post the one that's niggling at your memory....................stan

R

raj

14 years 3 months ago

yet another write which is testimony of your compassionate and empathetic heart...

warmly..

S

thank you raj. I expect it takes one to know one.....................stan