sueb
sueb
Feb 08, 2013

Broken Heart

A heart never broken
pristine and sterile
I pity their perfection
their memories futile

An unbroken heart
has not life experience
has not taken part
never suffered a grievance

A broken heart is a lesson
hard to learn but needed
its a beautiful blessing
hopefully not oft repeated

A broken heart gives us
strength and compassion
empathy a welcome plus
wearing it on my sleeve, fashion

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Ireland, IRL

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Comments

Seren

Seren

12 years 2 months ago

I must be getting jaded and old I just didn't like the theme
I can't see a broken heart as a beautiful blessing

The rhyme felt forced I can't offer anything constructive
Maybe rewrite with less forced rhyme

Hugs Jc x