crypticbard
Dec 20, 2012

Light Our Path Ahead

Into a new dark age
we go, marching,
careening headlong

[of soapbox poetry
there is no want
for many a voice
loudly rail and rant]

the terrain of our
condition and that
of our experience
has changed over
year upon year of
progress that has brought
us closer to the edge
of a generation that
lives on the horizon

itself

peering further on

beyond

to challenges invisible
to our yet untrained minds

so a new era begins
pioneering unexplored
vastnesses and
before unrecognised
darknesses

while on the remotest reaches
bright lights we have yet

to define and harness
beckon
to our whetted appetite
for tomorrows.

[Into itself, beyond vast darkness, remote lights beckon our tomorrows.]

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About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Country/Region: AUS

Favorite Poets: There is nothing quite as boring as a life completely devoid of shadows.

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loved

loved

12 years 4 months ago

welcome back
after a long abstention...
was it on purpose
to produce....
you know what I mean

your friend loved

C

No. It was two main things,
Computers crashing &
Emotions dashing..
It was a year that was beyond blue
The dark of a mind's night is that hue.

weirdelf

I suspect there could be some minor edits, and forgive me if I forget to come back and suggest them, but read it aloud to yourself and see what you can come up with.