maybe in the way of owning your loving heart
i might lose the chance and we'll fall apart..
still,of this great day you became the sweetest part
i fell for you not by recession but by means of art
i might disappear right after this poem,
and will be contented with this time for a while,
but forever will i wish i could have a chance to see you again,
without knowing when and not knowing your name..
Style/Type: Free verse
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Comments
so beautiuful
Peter
this is so romantic ,beautiful poem.
I agree, Mona...a keeper and
I agree, Mona...a keeper and a kept secret locked in one's heart
~A