scribbler
Dec 19, 2010

TAKING RISKS

Write a poem, then wait a while
after it sneaks out to view
did it make folks laugh or smile
when it underwent purview

Imperfect just like the writer
awaiting the pointing of mistakes
the web is the final best arbiter
opinion that both makes and breaks

Go away for just a bit
and fill the mind with mundane things
then get drawn right back to it
ignoring other far flung flings

Ah ! Some comments have been posted
angst, what do folks have to say
will I get toasted or get roasted
which is se t to come my way ?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is for all who are brave enough to post poetry for others' viewing

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

Edevold

I like the way you just let your consciousness and thought flow into this poem..... Kudos

It's not great, but it's good,,, and thoughtful, and a good shot of honesty with some flow......(again the word flow)

I like your last words: "this is for all who are brave enough"" That would be a great title to start from.....

S

I'll settle for good on this one lol. I fear that great is beyond my means. Good of you to drop in and comment............scribbler

S

I have also been suprised by which of my stuff is received the best. Reckon that's why this site is here, to let us know what is and isn't good..............stan

mand

mand

14 years 4 months ago

You never know what kind of reaction your going to get! But it's great too when people take the time to read, comment and help - where help is needed.

Loved one - nothing to crit, just love your work

Love Mand xxxxx

S

What lead me to take the risk was the abysmal "poem" read at the last inauguration. I Said to myself, " self, even I can surely do better than that sorry excuse " lol. I am glad you like my little attempts...............stan